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Selket
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 11, 2005 1:58 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey, want to talk about this some more? Let's start on the cheesy one first. Actions in emphasis. Put it to the tune of Producers. Thoughts in bold.

AY
I want to be a pharaoh, with a kingdom at my feet!
Dusts off throne.
I want to be a pharaoh so I can :snap: and everything would go my way!
Snaps fingers and servants bring him stuff.
No more fooling with temples, and silly worship of the sun.
See the closure of Sun TempleWhen I become pharaoh everything will be more...fun
:whisper: At least to me.

HOREMHAB
A want to be pharaoh, because let's face it: Egypt needs a guy like me!
History remebers it Thutmosis' because they acted when they should!
Show pictures of famous generals, to get a laugh include George Washington & Napoleon.I want to see this Kingdom stech to the farthest thing. Show Egypt in background, gestures.
Peaceful people don't live in peaceful times.
Show him thrust a weapon into a Ankhenaten statue.
Naturally, Anhkie and me didn't always see all to eye...
But also naturally, you would rather lie than die-- :Door suddenly opens:

:TUT enters:
Hi you two. I was wondering where you are? What were you talking about, something about death?
:The two look at each other:
AY: We were...saying how sad it is your father died.
HOREMHEB: Yes, he was a strong and hor-honorable man.
TUT:Oh. Alright, later I want to talk with you about the military budget.
HOREMHEB: Yes, Your Highness.
:TUT leaves room:
AY: Pesky kid.
H: I know, but what can we do? Hopefully he will die young.
A: But kid rulers can live until 90! PepiII did!
H: Oh Set! We will all be dead by then.
A: No kidding:rollseyes: I bet you could ask that kid for gold chariots,and he would give it to you.
H: Why would I want gold chariots? It's a weak metal...
A: Unlike your skull. Look, do us all a favor & go to Maya and buy a sense of humor!
:H leaves disgusted:
Silly boy. I want to be pharaoh, and he's an egotistic jerk.Stab my back in the end. Be the death of me, eh Northern Warrior? I say no.Ay
Silly old man. I want to be pharaoh, and there he is looking the part! Mark my words, Ay the old, treacherous scum & suck up! You will be vanquished. Even your very name will be erased! As will be the fate of the peace loving fool, his foreign wretch, and all their scornful children. Thus says Horemheb!
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 15, 2005 5:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Congrats, Selket!!! Surprised I adore these, expecially Ay's first lines... Very Happy Well, I try to make some other scenes, but... we'll see, then. But these are great!! Very Happy So congratulations again!! Smile

Oh, and I forgot to write: what shall be the next scene Question
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 18, 2005 2:42 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

"How did it get this way?"

Mahu: I'm a little lost. Why are you so happy all of a sudden?
Maya: Maybe we have been sad for too long.
Mahu: But why would that be??? Ankhenaton was pharaoh.
Ay laughs. Ay: There are pharaohs, and then there are [i]pharaohs[/i].
Mahu: But what does that have to do with Horemheb getting really drunk and writing ubsurb plans to conquer the world?
Ay: It simply means he is in a good mood.
Maya: Nay he simply isn't asking the right question. "How did it get this way?"

Music starts. Singing.
Ay: How did it get this way? Simple question,often times a fatal mistake!It takes a lot of bravery and not alittle gumption to say:How did it get this way?
I remeber how good it was, and yes oh yes one time it was good. I was not a favorite,but as long as you had Amun at your back you didn't need to be a favorite.
The King was Amenhotep III. His wife was pretty,his rule firm. This was something other countries soon discermed.

Maya: The gold was steady, the gifts were flowing. The messengers & traders were always ready to go. My those anvoys put a mighty good show!
Ay: But then a young hotheaded radical--renamed himself Ahkenaton and you young braves place him all the blame. Which is fair,I do the same.

"Personally I find your singing lame!"Horemheb enters suddenly.
Horemheb: Oh he must have been a radical--and sometimes Egypt needs a radical. But let's face it: pacifism is alittle too radical when the Hittites could invade at any moment. Let's not forget the weaker the rod--the weaker the kingdom!

Lostris continue from there. I hope you get there personalities by now.
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 18, 2005 9:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Whoa. These are really amazing... Shocked Shocked Shocked Are you a writer, a poet or something like that?? Very Happy I can realise.. ^^.

Anyway, what shall be the next scene? Because, in the outline, we planned to start with Amenhotep III, but now Akhenaten also died... so? Maybe we could involve some scenes between Tutankhamon and Ankhesenamun - my second favourite in this little musical. Wink Or something else?

Anybody else? Oh, come on, everybody... Smile So what do you think of the Tutankhamon/Ankhie scene? And a question: now they're in Thebes, not? They have already returned from Amarna?... I think. Smile

Or maybe we could put a scene of the burying of Akhenaten, or something like that.
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 19, 2005 9:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I am not writing the scenes in order. It's funny when I write stories I usually think of the Ending before the middle.

I want to see if you, Lostris are any good.
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 20, 2005 12:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Okay, then. That's what I thought about... well, it's not perfect, I know... Razz


MY LAST WORD
It's midnight, Tut is standing next to his bed - he can't sleep. He's thinking about his father, Akhenaten... Smile


TUTANKHAMON: You're still so far, but close enough
To give me an advice
These times are are very though
And I've failed once or twice.

Tut looks at the moon, looking for the sun, but he doesn't see it, of course.

TUTANKAMON: I don't see you, my dear father
But you always told me that
I don't have to bother...
So why I feel so flat?
Nobody helps me, I'm alone
Where are you? Probably there... (*points at the sky*)
Where did you go?
I see you nowhere...
How will you help from far away?
Now I can't find my way.
Now I can't find my way.

Turns to the room.


TUTANKHAMON: I should have a perfect life
Servants, treasure and rule are nice
But everyone turned against me...
Food and drinks are so sweet.
But everyone turned against me.
The kingdom lies at my feet
But everyone turned against me.

Tut turns to the door.


TUTANKAMON: Why do they have to hate me?
Why can't we be a happy family?
What should I do, they'll kill me!
Help, my father, or don't you see?...
You are so far, I know
And don't see what happens
Now I know you don't see
Or just don't care...
Just don't care...

Tut sighs. Then he becomes angry.


TUTANKHAMON: If you don't care, I won't then
Just leave me to fail again!
I'm not interested in
Your silly, fool thoughts about
the sun and your crowd
I'll return to good old Thebes;
That's my last word about it!
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 20, 2005 10:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey, after we are done writing about Ankhenaton how about we do a movie about the Old Testament?Mel Gibson proved that religion is big.Besides I love the Bible. :heart:

LET'S GET ON WITH IT

AY: It's a moving day, back to Thebes and back to reality! I have not been this happy since the Amenhotep awarded me with the position of advisor!

Ramsees whispers: I win. He's ancient.
Horemheb: You owe me 200 debens in beer.
Ramsees: Take two off my debt.
Horemheb:Deal.
[i]Two shake hands[/i]

AY: Everything is working as planed,my friend! I have the brains, you have the brawns & Egypts finest backing you up! Win/Win situation...
[i]We are going to give Tut this habit of busting just before Horemheb or Ay admit to treason.[/i]
TUT: Win what? A dice game?
AY: Yeah, Ramsees here was just telling me how he always wins at gambling!
[i]Horemheb struggles to contain his laughter.Ay glares at him[/i]
AY: I believe Horemheb is ill from too much alchohal. Ramsees,please take him home.
RAMSEES: Sure, thats what friends are for. Evil or Very Mad look on his face toward Horemheb.

TUT: Wait! I wanted to talk to you about the military issues!
[i]He runs after the two soldiers. The guards are nowhere to be seen because everyone is packing to get to Thebes.[/i]
AY:Wait! Come back! Ah well, no one listens to me anyhow!

[i]Ramsees and Horemheb walk past their old haunts in Akenaton[/i].
Lostris- You are better at lyrics than me. Write a duet akin to "I'm sure going to miss it- but not alot!"

Tut manages to catch up to the two buddies.
Tut: Where are you going?
R: Where did you come from?
H: Nevermind, we have to visit a very important place-
[i]This place is Moonlit Saloon. It's basically a tavern. Not exactly high class,great for people on a soldier's sallary. If the ancient Egyptians had country music, it would have been played there[/i].
Tut has never experianced anything like it before.
Horemheb goes and buys himself a drink.
H: Waiter, another round!
Waiter: Sir, I think 5 is enough.
Tut: I want a drink!
Waiter: Kid, you are going to have to pay for it.
Horemheb: But he is the pharaoh!
Waiter: And I am Swiss cheese!
Ramsees: Don't worry, I'll pay for Tut. Horemheb do you have two dollars?
Horemheb: I gave you two.
Ramsees: Oh right... [i]Gives waiter two deben.[/i]
I will pay you back,buddy.
Horemheb: Right. Rolling Eyes
[i]Waiter brings Tut a kiddie cocktail[/i]
Horemheb: Someday Rommel and Patton will battle it out on these plainesss---
Tut: Is he alright?
Ramsees: Yes, just drunk. How are you kid?
Tut: I don't think I can be pharaoh.
R: Why?
Tut: I'm not good enough.
Ramsees: Who says that?
Tut: Dad did, that's why Semenkhare is here.
Ramsees: I don't think he will last long. It doesn't matter how you get your throne,as long as you sit on it it's yours.
Tut: Thank You. I think someday you could be a pharaoh?
Ramsees: No, but it would be funny!
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 10:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hi, Selket!

I love your new lines, too, they are absolutely great! I was just thinking about how can you make all of them so perfect?? They are very good! So I guess you're a real writer or a poet, or not? Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy

I'm working on the new scene, too. Maybe I'll put it on here on Friday... sooner or later, but it will be up on Friday, it's sure!! Smile

Keep up the good work!!
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 26, 2005 2:37 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Alright, today is Friday Lostris and tommorrow will be Saturday so post away!
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 26, 2005 1:57 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm a filthy liar. Embarassed Sorry. I'm still working on it...
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 27, 2005 1:55 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Darling, I just make these up as I go along.

By the way, how often do you think one should check an Online RPG? The one I belong to is inactive alot so I don't know.
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 05, 2005 12:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Just a quick note: it's not only Selket's and my work! If you have some ideas for our opera, you could write down everything! Very Happy Remember, it's a KTO musical!!!! ^^. You can add lyrics, costume designs or anything you want, we're opened! ^^
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 06, 2005 12:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Lostris wrote:
Just a quick note: it's not only Selket's and my work! If you have some ideas for our opera, you could write down everything! Very Happy Remember, it's a KTO musical!!!! ^^. You can add lyrics, costume designs or anything you want, we're opened! ^^


Well, now that you mention it...I wanna do the storyboards. You know, I'll draw out the scenes as they happen. ^__^ So the actors could have an idea on what they're doing, like in the movies.

I wanted to draw Ay and Horemheb singing sooo badly!! Laughing It's just too good to pass up. Cool

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PostPosted: Tue Dec 06, 2005 2:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I want you guys to be the first to know of the miraculous twist ending...

Remember this debt that Ramses has,ok? He is one of those types of people who love their friends and are ready to die for them...or kill.

DIALOGUE
H: Who killed the Prince? I swear I will have his--
R: Me.
H: You, but why?
R: I owed you all that money and Ay sent me the treason filled letter,requesting that I attack the borders.
H: Ay...I understand now.
R: Are you going to kill me?I am more than ready,and if the gods find fault with me for being an honorable person-so be.
H: You don't understand. I am not mad at you.
R: What???I killed--
H: War is different,war is always different.I am proud of you. Ay is ancient. He'll kill over in a few years. You have repayed your debt with--interest.
R: And that means.
H: When I become pharaoh, you will become head of the military. You have a strong boy,Seti. After I die you will become king.
R: I do not know what to say--
H: That's ok, come on let's go get Tut and teach him archery.
R: You mean try to...
They leave for the palace.
tutness~How about you do the archery scene? I would be really cute.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 06, 2005 4:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Me? Do a scene?! Really?!?! Yaaay! Very Happy Awesome! Ok, well....my comic is gonna influence me...you asked for it. Twisted Evil

Arhcery scene!:

*In the king's chamber, young Tut is laying lazily in bed, looking out at the clear sky with a bored expression grazing his features. There is a light knocking, and he turns to see Ramses at his door*

Tut: ...Can I...help you...? *Quirks a brow*
Ramses: Your highness, it's time for your...archery lesson...*Narrows his eyes slightly*
Tut: *Sighs with exasperation, then sits up, giving the man a stubborn glare* I don't NEED to learn archery. I can do plenty good myself. *Defiantly smirks* I mean, I'd be a lot better at it than you...and Horemheb...
Ramses: *Quirks a brow in mockery*...Oh? *Smirks and tilts his head to the side*...Well, then...prove it...
Tut: *Blushes lightly, then hops to his feet, slipping on his sandles and marching out with pride* Fine, then. I will!
Ramses: *Rolls his eyes, sighing* Finally...

Outside!:
*Ay is watching the lesson from a high window in the palace, smirking with sadistic glee at the young king. Tut is strecthing his arms and legs with boredom, feigning the fact that he really hasn't a clue in the world. He is given a bow and arrow, and he stands proud, looking at the ostrich skin target, a red circle in the middle*

Tut: Ok! Now's MY time to show you morons who's boss around here!
Horemheb: Tch...just go...
Tut: *Turns to Horemheb angrily* WHAT WAS THAT?!
Horemheb: *Faking innocence, raising hands in a gesture of peace* Nothing, your highness...
Tut: *Grins* Heh, that's what I thought...now! As I was saying! *Begins to sing:*....Time to show these losers while I sing...that I'm no kid, I'm the greatest king...!!

*Tut holds up the arrow, ready, and after he sings he shoots...and the arrow falls flat on the ground. His eyes widen with confusion, and he looks down at the fallen arrow. After a pause, Horemheb and Ramses burst out laughing, clutching thier sides tightly. Ay laughs as well from his place at the window, holding onto the railing for support*

Ay: *Singing* That child...has yet to learn...*Smirks evilly*....what it takes to rule...if he can't even fire an arrow to smite his enemies...we are all truely doomed....

Tut: *Waving his fists in the air at the two on the ground, laughing at him* That was just a prentend shot!! I was just tricking you guys to see if you fell for it! *Grins defiantly, pointing at the two* And it looks like you fell for it! THIS is what I can do! *He readies another arrow, shoots...and yet again it hits the ground.*....Re-dammit!! That's not--!!

*The two laugh only harder at the king's follies, and they resume on the lesson, Tut growling and screaming that he never asked for thier help. Ay looking on, with a wider smirk.*

Ay: *Sings softly*..We are....truely doomed....

Yeah, that's what's in my comic too. All I did was add the little singing lines. Told ya it was gonna influence me! Laughing Cool I'll draw this scene tonight, and hopefully show you guys tomorrow. ^__^

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